DMH Fiction: Ysabella


She was jailbait. Pure and simple. She was a worm, dangling on a hook, enticing the fish to jump and take a bite, get hooked, and that’d be it.

But dammit, Lido couldn’t stay away from her. Ysabella Hernandez. Only the daughter of one of the city’s mob bosses. Gorgeously blonde, with innocent blue eyes that loved to dance with laughter.

Everyone loved her. Even the gay guys lusted for her.

When it came to someone like Ysabella Hernandez, though, only one man would ever have her. Gabriel.

She’d been promised to him young, an alliance between families. Like the obedient child she’d been raised to be, she didn’t look twice at another guy. Ever. She was going to be Gabriel’s, and that was all there was to it.

That’s why Lido didn’t know why she would be downstairs every day when he delivered the flowers for his father. Why she’d always say hi and ask how he was.

“Just delivering the flowers,” he said to her that one particular day.

“Surely you do more than that?”

Lido jumped as her father entered the front hall. “Our flowers,” he said, his voice so icy, Lido was convinced he was about to be turned into gourmet fish bait. Mr. Hernandez did that sort of thing — and for lesser offenses than talking to his daughter.

“Yes, sir,” he said, tearing his eyes from Ysabella. Before she left his field of vision, he noticed the way she bit back a smile. He couldn’t react. For one, if he blew this account for his dad, he’d be worse than fish bait. For another, he’d sooner never return to this house than turn himself into one of Mr. Hernandez’ victims.

Even if it meant never seeing Ysabella again.

“You’re lucky your father grows the best flowers in a three-hundred mile radius,” Ysabella’s father said, his face turning dark.

Lido nodded, trying not to be rude as he stared at the darkening face. But he’d never seen a face turn black before. He should have been scared, he knew.

It wasn’t his smartest move.

Ysabella came to his rescue. “Dad, my day’s not complete if I don’t say hi to Lido. You’re the one who says a woman’s job is to make any visitor feel special and welcome.”

Behind her back, right at the edge of Lido’s peripheral vision, he saw the hand gesture she made. Telling him she was blowing smoke up her dad’s scary ass.

Still, Lido swallowed audibly. “I just deliver the flowers, Mr. Hernandez. That’s my business. It’s all I care about. Doing my dad proud.”

Mr. Hernandez nodded, as if satisfied by what he was hearing. Lido didn’t believe he really was. Rather, the man was calculating, weighing, figuring. When the best time to snatch Lido would be. How much concrete would be needed to make sure he didn’t float.

“I need to be going,” Lido said into the silence. “I have other deliveries to make and a schedule to keep to. Always nice to see you again, Mr. Hernandez. Miss Hernandez.”

As Ysabella held the door for him, she mouthed, “Meet me in the park at nine tonight.”

Maybe a smart man would have listened, but Lido wasn’t necessarily a smart man. Not when it came to Ysabella Hernandez.

DMH stands for Deadly Metal Hatchet, a small, up-and-coming band who sometimes populates these pages. This piece is set before the band; this situation with Ysabella is the eventual reason why Lido joins the guys and tries to get out of town.

This was inspired by this week’s Three Word Wednesday prompt, and I’m including it as a #FridayFlash piece, and posting it at Weekend Writer’s Retreat, too. That’s a lot of bang for one buck!



  1. Darcia Helle

    July 23, 2010 2:49 pm

    Great piece! I want to be Ysabella Hernandez!
    .-= Darcia Helle´s last blog ..Ghost Attack! =-.

  2. Marisa Birns

    July 23, 2010 2:50 pm

    Oh what a wonderful debut to share with the #fridayflash community. Welcome!

    Poor Lido.
    .-= Marisa Birns´s last blog ..Memento Mori =-.

  3. Eric J. Krause

    July 23, 2010 3:08 pm

    Guys always do dumb stuff for pretty girls. This was a good story!
    .-= Eric J. Krause´s last blog ..3 Sci-Fi Podcast Stories =-.

  4. Rachel Blackbirdsong

    July 23, 2010 3:24 pm

    Welcome to #Fridayflash interesting story. I’m hooked and waiting for more.
    .-= Rachel Blackbirdsong´s last blog ..Sunday =-.

  5. Alice Audrey

    July 23, 2010 5:27 pm

    Wait. Is he too smart to meet her, or not?
    .-= Alice Audrey´s last blog ..Suzie’s House 174- His Call =-.

  6. Dee

    July 23, 2010 5:49 pm

    good back story. Chics like that always seem to get guys in trouble!
    .-= Dee´s last blog ..July 23 =-.

  7. K

    July 23, 2010 6:34 pm

    Wow, Lido is about to be in real trouble. Ysabella must be something else to make a man risk his life for…

    Nice story.

  8. Ann (bunnygirl)

    July 23, 2010 6:59 pm

    None of the guys in DMH strike me as terribly bright, so Lido’s adventures are going to make some fun reading.
    .-= Ann (bunnygirl)´s last blog ..New Fiction =-.

  9. J. M. Strother

    July 23, 2010 7:39 pm

    Well done. Very atmospheric. This guy is in sooo much trouble, no matter what he does.
    .-= J. M. Strother´s last undefined ..If you register your site for free at =-.

  10. Julia Smith

    July 23, 2010 8:16 pm

    ‘How much concrete would be needed to make sure he didn’t float.’

    LOL! Wickedly funny. This was one of my favorite backstory posts ever. Love the sense of danger.
    .-= Julia Smith´s last blog ..Thursday Thirteen – 168 – 13 International Folk Dances For Male Dancers =-.

  11. John Wiswell

    July 23, 2010 11:41 pm

    Women can get me to do anything, too. You certainly plugged this cable into a lot of outlets. Glad you’re enjoying the responses.
    .-= John Wiswell´s last blog ..Bathroom Monologue- Fates of the Stepdaughter =-.

  12. Donna Hole

    July 24, 2010 4:45 am

    Young toughs in love. Way cool. He’ll be an interesting character for an ongoing story.

    .-= Donna Hole´s last blog ..THREE WORD WEDNESDAY =-.

  13. ThomG

    July 24, 2010 8:58 am

    She’s trouble, he’s in trouble and the tension in this is great.
    .-= ThomG´s last blog ..Guest Writer- Garasamo Maccagnone =-.

  14. Vivek

    July 24, 2010 5:48 pm

    How to get into trouble- Lido’s way!
    .-= Vivek´s last blog ..Prelude =-.

  15. Aidan Fritz

    July 25, 2010 1:33 pm

    Amusing tale with interesting characters. Nice debut FridayFlash post.

  16. Estrella Azul

    July 27, 2010 5:05 am

    Oh, poor guy, either way he’s in quite a bit of trouble 🙂 Loved it, welcome to #fridayflash!
    .-= Estrella Azul´s last blog ..Recipes of the month- Raspberry Muffins and Cheese Cookies =-.

  17. Cathy Olliffe

    July 28, 2010 10:17 am

    A lot of bang for the buck indeed! Great story! Welcome to flash!
    .-= Cathy Olliffe´s last blog ..How To Find A Man =-.

  18. Mari Juniper

    July 30, 2010 4:09 pm

    I’m late but I’m here. Welcome to Friday Flash dear!

    This Lido guy seems to be very brave to go up against a dangerous mobster like Mr. Hernandez. Is Ysabella’s heart to be broken?

    I hope you’ll feed our curiosity. 😉
    .-= Mari Juniper´s last blog ..Book Review – The Ainu and the Bear- by Ryo Michico =-.

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