Poetry Monday — Words Like Beautiful


Robin told a href=”http://creativegoddesses.blogspot.com”Rhian/a to declare today to be Poetry Monday (or something like that), so here’s my contribution.

If I could write our story,
words like “beautiful”
wouldn’t exist.

We would have all the time
we could ever want;
No fears of getting
too attached,
of needing to define the rules,
of clinging to mind games,
only to see me leave you for a new life,
a life without you
except for far-between weekend visits.

And you wouldn’t tell me –
your arms around my waist,
me perched on the tops of your feet
but my chin still no higher than
the middle of your chest –
that when you look at her,
all you see is beauty.

And that’s the one thing I can’t offer you.
Or so you say.

If I could write our story, Mario dear,
there wouldn’t be such a gap between us –
not that height matters,
not that money matters,
not that age matters,
but it’s all about living.

You would understand about relationships-
that women are best when they are both
girlfriends and friends,
and that you can have the second,
without the first.

And I would understand about you –
your fragile ego,
your need to be a man, not a boy,
your thoughts,
your wants;
And all the potential that I see so clearly in you now
would be realized.

I promise you that if I could write this story,
That’s how it would be.

Remember, though,
that there are things I could never change
in this fiction I long to write:
The planes and angles
that make up your face
and cause something inside me
to catch, then melt —
even though I mean it when I say
that beauty’s far from everything.

There’s the gentle way you kiss;
and your hands so soft and ghostlike
that after your touch,
even a whisper feels harsh;

You say I am not beautiful
but still,
you make me believe
you’d never hurt me –
that’s what you promised.
Isn’t it?

So if I could write our ending,
it would happen on the ice –
in the middle of a hockey game –
and you would realize this:

That we are comfortable together,
and that the beauty of our friendship
is what matters,
not how beautiful you or I appear
when we look at each other.

And one day you will realize —
I guarantee you will,
even if I don’t write this story —
that this is the the kind of beauty –
the only kind –
that I will ever have to offer you.

If I could write our story,
it would be enough.

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  1. Lauren

    April 23, 2007 5:21 pm

    Not much of a poetry fan but that was very nice! 🙂

  2. Rhian / Crowwoman

    April 23, 2007 5:46 pm

    beautifully bittersweet – amazing how many emotions it evokes.

  3. Christine

    April 23, 2007 6:27 pm

    Okay wow! I could really feel the distance between the speaker and Mario. I love it Susan!

  4. Robin L. Rotham

    April 23, 2007 6:51 pm

    OMG, can I ever relate to this — it brought tears to my eyes. Thank you, Susan!

  5. Thomma Lyn

    April 23, 2007 7:18 pm

    *sniff*, Susan. What a moving, Ibeautiful/I poem. Got me teary-eyed.

  6. Amy Ruttan

    April 23, 2007 7:39 pm

    Oooh very good. I enjoyed it.BR/BR/I wrote a Haiku, very late in the day. I forgot it was poetry Monday.BR/BR/It’s a Haiku about the EVIL DAY JOB.BR/BR/Not as nice as yours.

  7. Susan Helene Gottfried

    April 23, 2007 8:04 pm

    Thanks, guys! This is from my grad school days; every now and then, I’ve played with the idea of submitting it for publication somewhere. BR/BR/From your response, maybe I should.

  8. Wylie Kinson

    April 23, 2007 8:39 pm

    The hurt, the wisdom, the acceptance of reality/fate… beautiful (dare I use that word?) !!

  9. mcewen

    April 23, 2007 9:41 pm

    Good grief! Any thoughts I ever had about attempting to post my efforts have just died a savage death.BR/Cheers

  10. ERiCA

    April 23, 2007 9:47 pm

    I’m so enjoying being part of the poetry train. Great to read all the poems! =)

  11. Sam

    April 24, 2007 2:08 am

    This is really lovely!!!!

  12. Sam

    April 24, 2007 2:14 am

    PS – thank you for your kind words about my princess/knight story, and I’ll check out your shelf at mooch!!

  13. Rashenbo

    April 24, 2007 10:06 am

    Dude… you rock with poetry :)BR/BR/As I’ve been telling all these poets… poetry is not something I have any real skill with 🙂 I can still admire it though 😀

  14. karen!

    April 24, 2007 11:12 am

    Lovely poem, S.BR/Truly lovely.

  15. Robyn Mills

    April 24, 2007 12:09 pm

    Very touching.

  16. spyscribbler

    April 24, 2007 4:22 pm

    Poetry Monday? Is that going to be ongoing?BR/BR/Wow, I love poetry. I’m so impressed with this poem! I hope you do it again next week! BR/BR/Now where are all these other Poetry Monday folks?

  17. Susan Helene Gottfried

    April 24, 2007 4:24 pm

    Follow the link in the post to Rhian’s joint. She’s got everyone linked there.

  18. Sanni

    April 24, 2007 6:49 pm


  19. David

    April 29, 2007 11:03 am

    the poem was great!BR/thanks for the visit,BR/I am wondering if I heard of BookCrossings.com from you or another source? also have you seen “bookins.com” an exchange of used books that is brilliant. BR/BR/I love books.

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