June 10, 2021
Like every other editor — every other human being, probably — I have opinions. Fortunately, I have a blog and a way to express those opinions, especially when they’re food for thought about the craft of writing, and might therefore help someone work toward mastering the craft.
Today’s rant is all about a phrase that’s ubiquitous. Ready?
They thought to themself.
I mean, hello? Unless you’re telepathic, you can’t think to anyone BUT yourself.
There are a lot of phrases that, as an editor, I’ll immediately change or delete. That’s because it’s not that awful a phrase. I mean, I don’t see it and cringe, like I do other phrases (they nodded their head, for instance. Or the famous shrugging of the shoulders). But I do smile.
Because, seriously. Who else would the character be directing their thoughts toward? Like… I can’t even.
Now, this is different from the also ubiquitous They smiled to themself.
Know why? Because even though your mouth is on the outside of your body (and I knew that without taking an anatomy class!), and therefore on display to the public, sometimes, those smiles are for your (or your character’s) sensibilities only. Not every single one, unless your character’s got a hell of an internal social life, but… yeah. It happens. Characters smile to themselves. People smile to themselves.
I think that one’s pretty normal.
But if there are too many, the words get highlighted and my index finger meets the delete button and yes, yes I do smile evilly.
That doesn’t negate the fact that They thought to themself is redundant and a waste of two words. While there’s more room to use words carelessly in a novel, why do it at all? Save those words for when you need them!
As a reminder, I’m here to work as your editor if you need me. Or if your friend needs me. But please, don’t send that person you don’t like. That’s really not very nice.
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